mira a nuestras edades....no puedo creer que no me vees asi.

Hi, Hola, yea your text is more or less wrote, but you can use this phrase too.

Mira las edades que tenemos, y no puedo creer que no veas asi como yo quiero que me veas.

I suppose it's so:
"mira que edad tenemos.... no puedo creer que no me veas así"
"Look what age whe both have... I can't believe that you don't see me so."

saludos :D

Mira a nuestras edades... No puedo creer que no me veas así.I understand that written correctly also include orthography.

I can only see a grammatical mistake, the morphology of veas.

There are more options to express the same thing, but I don't think you need to change anything more.

I understand that written correctly also includes orthography.

I can only see a grammatical mistake, the morphology of veas.

There are more options to express the same thing, but I don't think you need to change anything else.
I hope my corrections do not confuse you. But you can always write a letter of complaint...;)

I hope my corrections do not confuse you. But you can always write a letter of complaint...;)Thanks a lot for your corrections. They are really clear.