is this written correctly.....
 

Hi, Hola, yea your text is more or less wrote, but you can use this phrase too.

Mira las edades que tenemos, y no puedo creer que no veas asi como yo quiero que me veas.

I suppose it's so:
"mira que edad tenemos.... no puedo creer que no me veas así"
"Look what age whe both have... I can't believe that you don't see me so."

saludos :D

I understand that written correctly also include orthography.

I can only see a grammatical mistake, the morphology of veas.

There are more options to express the same thing, but I don't think you need to change anything more.

I hope my corrections do not confuse you. But you can always write a letter of complaint...;)

Thanks a lot for your corrections. They are really clear.