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Old February 20, 2012, 01:25 PM
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Originally Posted by Lizarrdo View Post
La semana pasada fue (the words that follow don't mean Global Citizenship Week - you're close, though - that said, I don't think the Spanish translation includes the word 'week' in the name) semanas la ciudadanía global. GCW (this is the English abbreviation of Global Citizenship Week - if you want to use the English abbreviation, you need to introduce it in a preceding sentence - otherwise, introduce the Spanish abbreviation and then you can use it instead) es una semana (it isn't a week for the students - it has a purpose which is stated in the next sentence, so this is unnecessary information) por (wrong preposition) estudiantes de (missing article) escuela secundaria. Enla ('one', instead of 'the') semana, (missing article) estudiantes aprendieron sobre los problemas mundiales o participaron en servicio a la comunidad. Para mi semana, me quedé en Tailandia. Mi GCW fue (missing preposition) La Escuela de Sordos. Al comienzo, (yo) pienso (wrong tense) que el viaje (would be bad). Me equivoqué.

(missing article) Día uno fue satisfactorio y (yo) conocí a un amigo Nuevo (watch agreement - your friend is female - there's no need to capitalize the word 'nuevo') en la escuela de sordos. Su nombre es Cantoon y ella tiene dieciséis (missing a noun). Yo y mis otros amigos, Yoon-Jin y HaMin, anduvieron (seems odd to end the sentence here). Después (missing the rest of the phrase) la introducción, nosotros comimos* en Central Plaza. El día fue muy divertido.


(missing article) Dia segundo fue similar a (missing article) dia uno pero (nosotros) pintamos camisetas. (missing article) Dia tres y (missing article)dia Fueron los mejores porque yo y mi amiga Cantoon montaron (wrong person) el “huracán” en (missing article) mundo de los sueños (Dreamworld). Los niños sordos fueron (wrong tense and person) muy feliz (watch agreement) y yo admire que (spelling problem in the verb and I don't think you meant to end the sentence with a conjunction).
I marked things that need correction in red and gave hints as to what type of change is needed in purple.

You may want to change 'second day' to 'day two', since all the other days were numbered using cardinals.

Last edited by Rusty; February 20, 2012 at 01:28 PM.
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