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"coin" instead of money
"real" instead of "of truth"
the rest is OK, but to keep the poetical sense, language level and avoid losing the meaning, I'd suggest:
With this coin
I'm gonna buy
A bouquet of sky
And three feet of sea,
One point of a star
A real-deal sun
Six ounces of breeze
And nothing besides
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