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Old July 07, 2016, 06:52 PM
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Buenas a todos! Soy nuevo en el foro y si este hilo no procede por favor háganmelo saber.

Me gustaría que me dijesen si consideran correcto el pequeño texto que les voy a poner a continuación, o si modificarían algo. Muchas gracias de antemano:

The Museum of Natural History of the USC(Es mejor escribir "USC" sin artículo, a menos que escriba el nombre completo.) had its origins in the 19th century as a (Si era la única institución de ese nombre o de ese tipo, es mejor escribir "the".) Cabinet of Natural History housing botanical, zoological and geological collections. In 1906 it reaches the category of Natural History Museum located in the building that now houses the Faculty of Geography and History, from where, in 1961, it was moved to the former Faculty of Sciences (nowadays Faculty of Chemistry).

In 2014 it was settled in a new building, donated by the Consortium of the City of Santiago for its exclusive use. The museum undergoes profound changes in this new phase, both in the exhibition halls and its activities, because besides its research and formal education, it focuses its future on popular science, responding to the commitment this University has with society.
Este texto parece ser un texto de publicidad. Si eso es el caso, entonces coincido con poli: puede mejorar el texto por usar dos o más oraciones cortas y más sencillas en lugar de una muy larga y compleja.
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