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Old June 11, 2010, 11:13 AM
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I wish to add to what LibraryLady said. Not only is it a long statement to be said in anger, but if one is wishing to engage in oratory due to one's anger (and thus be willing to speak such a long sentence) one is likely to add many expletives between one's words. As this is a family forum I won't provide specific examples but I'm certain you can guess at what I mean.

This, along with possible rephrasing, would account for a lower number of results in Google for your exact quote. However, that said, I believe it is quite accurate as is with a few small corrections: "Shut up! I'm doing the talking here."

The "I'm" contraction in this case seems to flow much better than "I am" in my opinion. Either are of course correct. The real change I made was to turn it into two sentences. This was necessary for it to be correct (or perhaps a semi-colon, but I think an end of sentence works better).
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