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Old August 24, 2016, 04:38 PM
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Friends play an important role in a person’s life, they make our lives interesting and wonderful. They always are there for us. In short, siblings from different mother, that’s what friends are. But, there are a few things that you need to do to make and keep friends.
You should always keep in touch with your friends. Show a genuine interest in what's going on in their lives and how they think and feel about things. Keeping in touch with friends is easier now because we can use a social networking platform to communicate with them. Also, it is important always thank your friend when he or she does something for you and don’t forget tell your friend how much you appreciate them.
Friendship should be based on honesty, it is necessary to build trust and to have confidence. If you don't have honesty in a friendship, you dont have a good friendship. Friends are one of the most important people in our lives, for this reason it is essential for friends to be honest with one another.
True friends accept you exactly as you are. You don’t have to hide or pretend that you are something that you’re not. Be yourself and the right people will love the real you. A true friend will never judge you. They will stand by you no matter what you believe or what you do.
To conclude, friends are always there for each other. There are things you can do with your best friends that you can never do with anyone else. Friends are family you choose.
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Old August 24, 2016, 09:16 PM
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Keep you on my side
Friends play an important role in a person’s life, (end of sentence)
they make our lives interesting and wonderful.
They always are (switch order) there for us.
In short, siblings from different mother(), that’s what friends are.
But, there are a few things that you need to do to make and keep friends.
You should always keep in touch with your friends.
Show a genuine interest in what's going on in their lives and how they think and feel about things.
Keeping in touch with friends is easier now because we can use a social networking platform to communicate with them.
Also, it is important always () thank your friend when he or she does something for you() and don’t forget tell your friend how much you appreciate them. (Since you used 'he or she' in the first clause, you should not switch to using 'them' in the last clause. But this mistake is made by native speakers every now and then.)
Friendship should be based on honesty, (end of sentence)
it is necessary to build trust and to have confidence.
If you don't have honesty in a friendship, you dont have a good friendship.
Friends are one of the most important people in our lives, (end of sentence)
for this reason() it is essential for friends to be honest with one another.
True friends accept you exactly as you are.
You don’t have to hide or pretend that you are something that you’re not.
Be yourself and the right people will love the real you.
A true friend will never judge you.
They will stand by you no matter what you believe or what you do. (Here you used 'they'. Consider using this above where you opted for 'he or she'.)
To conclude, friends are always there for each other.
There are things you can do with your best friends that you can never do with anyone else.
Friends are family you choose.
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Old August 25, 2016, 02:49 PM
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Thank you I really appreciate your help! It has been useful to me.
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