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Old October 21, 2014, 10:42 AM
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Post Correcting a piece of Spanish Text

Hi, I've been stuck on correcting the errors in this text for ages, please help D; The errors can be:
Spelling, punctuation, capital letters
Verb Form
Grammar error: gender/agreement
Word order
Incorrect word/meaning
Missing words

Help please :3

Era una noche de luna llena y había tormenta. Fui a el túnel oscuro a coger un tren, de repente escuché grité. ¡Sale el fantasma! Me dijo con una sonrisa espeluznante: "Morrirás morrirás. ¡Morrirás!" gritó. ¡Corrí y corrí despavorida! No podía ver, estaba demasiado oscuro. Oí gemideo y gritos. Todavia, corrí. Desde entonces nadie usa el túnel oscuro. Nunca olvidaré este, story nuna. Morrirás morrirás. ¡Morrirás!
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Old October 21, 2014, 11:18 AM
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Nice story and good work.

Here are some suggestions and hints to improve it:

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Era una noche de luna llena y había tormenta. Fui a el (Check the use of contractions) túnel oscuro a coger un tren, de repente escuché grité (You need a noun here, not a conjugated verb). ¡Sale el fantasma! Me dijo con una sonrisa espeluznante: "Morrirás morrirás. ¡Morrirás!" (Check spelling) gritó. ¡Corrí y corrí despavorida! No podía ver, estaba demasiado oscuro. Oí gemideo (Check your dictionary, this is not Spanish) y gritos. Todavia, (Check spelling) corrí. Desde entonces nadie usa el túnel oscuro. Nunca olvidaré este, story nuna (Check this, it's not Spanish). Morrirás morrirás. ¡Morrirás! (Spelling)
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