Hello, I need your help

[mariajosetiz]

Hello, my name is Maria Jose.
I'm studying to be a translator and I come from Chile. Can anyone help me to correct this text, please?

Hello everyone, I'm going to tell you my story. I’m Hermia. I’m come from Athens. A place where usually women are forced to do something that we don’t want to do. Like in mi case, I was truly and deeply in love with a man called Lysander but my father, Egeus, command me to marry with Demetrius who I was not in love with and I will never be. If a refused to my father’s command I had two options: I’ll either be executed or I’ll never see another man again. However, our love was so powerful. I was sure of my feelings for Lysander. We had a plan which consisted in run away together, far of our families, far from Athens. So then, we could live our love. But then, something happened, and Lysander felt in love with my best friend, Helena, and also was Demetrius, both of them were fighting for the love of Helena. Finally, everything came back normal. Demetrius felt in love with Helena and my love, Lysander, only had eyes for me, his true love. Well, this is my story. Now I’m happily married with Lysander and I hope this love last forever.

[Rusty]

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Originally Posted by mariajosetiz

Hello, my name is Maria Jose.
I'm studying to be a translator and I come from Chile. Can anyone help me to correct this text, please?

Hello everyone, I'm going to tell you my story. I’m Hermia.
I’m come from Athens. (not the end of the sentence) A place where usually (move this before 'forced') women are forced to do something that we don’t want to do.
Like in mi case, I was truly and deeply in love with a man named Lysander() but my father, Egeus, command me to (wrong tense and verb, use a conjugated form of 'insist', followed by 'I') marry with Demetrius() who ('whom' is prescriptive grammar, but 'who' is commonly used here) I was not in love with and I will (move this before 'be') never be.
If a refused to my father’s command (use 'mandate' or 'wishes')() I had two options: I’ll (use the conditional mood) either be executed or I’ll never see another man again.
However,
our love was so powerful. I was sure of my feelings for Lysander.
We had a plan which consisted in run (needs to be a gerund, or you can just say 'We planned to run away') away together, far of our families, far from Athens.
So then, we could live our love (not quite the right expression).
But then, something happened(), and (end of sentence) Lysander felt in love with my best friend, Helena, and also was (use 'so did') Demetriusalso fell in love with Helena. (end of sentence)
both of them were fighting [COLOR="Red"]for the love of Helena (use another preposition, like 'over', and reduce 'the love of Helena' to just 'Helena').
Finally, everything came (use a conjugated form of 'turn') back () (provide the preposition that goes with 'turn back') normal.
Demetrius felt in love with Helena and my love, Lysander, only had eyes for me, his true love.
Well, this is my story.
Now I’m happily married with (use 'to') Lysander and I hope this love last (concordance) forever.

[mariajosetiz]

Thanks you! I really appreciate it.

[Rusty]

You're welcome. If you have questions, don't hesitate to ask.