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Liquinn3
May 24, 2013, 11:55 AM
Me dedico con aprender español. Estoy dedicarse yo mismo a español y gozo el idioma español. Me gusta hablar con personas. Necesito mejoro mi escribir en español.
Is the above correct? I can't decide whether "Me dedico con aprender español." or "Estoy dedicarse yo mismo a español y gozo el idioma español" is correct or whether they can both be used too.
Thanks, saludos a todos. :)
Rusty
May 24, 2013, 05:30 PM
Me dedico con (wrong preposition) aprender español.
Estoy dedicarse (needs to be converted to a present participle, with appropriate-to-person reflexive pronoun and attention to stressed syllable) yo mismo a (at least an article is needed) español y gozo (wrong verb) el (missing preposition) idioma español.
Me gusta hablar con (an article is preferred here) personas.
Necesito mejoro (you can't have two conjugated verbs in the same clause) mi escribir (incorrect word) en español.In addition to the errors marked, it would sound better if you didn't repeat things ("I'm dedicating myself to the Spanish language and I enjoy the Spanish language," for example, would sound much better if 'the Spanish language' weren't repeated). Use pronouns, just like you would in English. Since the correct verb for 'enjoy' takes a preposition (using your sentence structure), you'd need to use a prepositional object pronoun to say 'it', instead of 'the Spanish language'.
Liquinn3
May 25, 2013, 05:50 AM
In addition to the errors marked, it would sound better if you didn't repeat things ("I'm dedicating myself to the Spanish language and I enjoy the Spanish language," for example, would sound much better if 'the Spanish language' weren't repeated). Use pronouns, just like you would in English. Since the correct verb for 'enjoy' takes a preposition (using your sentence structure), you'd need to use a prepositional object pronoun to say 'it', instead of 'the Spanish language'.
I've made the changes. Thanks. :)
Me dedico a aprender español, gozo el idioma español. Me gusta hablar con las personas. Necesito mejorar mi escritura en español.
Rusty
May 25, 2013, 06:26 AM
Me dedico a aprender español, gozo el idioma español. Me gusta hablar con las personas. Necesito mejorar mi escritura en español.Better! You're still using the wrong verb for 'enjoy'. The one you're using means 'possess/have', as in 'I have (enjoy) good health'. When you find the right verb, it is followed by a preposition (gozar is also followed by the same preposition you'll need to use).
Liquinn3
May 25, 2013, 06:31 AM
Me dedico a aprender español, me gusta el idioma español. Me gusta hablar con las personas. Necesito mejorar mi escritura en español.
Also, can I post up more tenses? I need to make sure all is fine with them. Writing Spanish is so hard. :( Why do you think I have problems writing Spanish? :P I think I have problems with writing it, but natives have said my writing is good... lol
Rusty
May 25, 2013, 09:15 PM
You might want to look up the verb for 'enjoy'. It'll come in handy one day.
You also missed a punctuation problem.
Written orthographic marks and punctuation are the problems most people have with writing. To correct these problems, you must read a lot of Spanish articles and novels and take note how the written language appears.
You can't blame poor grammar and poor word choices on writing. ;)
Instead of posting sentences that list several persons in the same tense, which all of us can easily find in a verb chart, why don't you take the time to formulate unique sentences that employ different tenses and different subjects (try to avoid using subject pronouns)? That would be a better challenge for you.
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