Homework- Paragraph
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sushaneg
November 13, 2010, 10:55 AM
Hi I wrote a paragraph based on a movie I watched for a homework assignment. I've gone through and edited it myself but I just want to make sure that there are no errors. Ignore the underlined words. Thanks.
Yo pienso que Carlitos y Enrique van a tener vidas muchas diferentes de cada otra. Yo pienso que Carlitos va a cambiar mucho con su madre Rosario. Tanto Carlitos y Rosario van a olvidar sus vidas anteriores porque los ellos tendrán logrado sus sueños para reuniendo con cada otra. Yo pienso que Rosario va a preguntar Paco para casarse la; Paco perdonarás Rosario y los ellos se llevarán bien. El matrimonio ayudara Carlitos porque Carlitos vivirá una vida sana; Carlitos no se sentirá triste y podrá ir a la escuela y hacer nuevos amigos prontos. Paco cuidará su familia nueva muy bien. En contraste, Enrique va a tener problemas. Enrique capturo para la migra y él va a enviar de regreso a México. Yo pienso que Carlitos nunca va a Enrique otra vez y porque Carlitos no tiene la dirección de Enrique o su número de teléfono, Carlitos olvidará Enrique muy rápido. Sin embargo, yo pienso que Enrique vivirá su vida sintiendo bueno porque él guardó un amigo de un posibilidad mal; yo pienso que Enrique será recompensa para su acción en el futuro.
Rusty
November 13, 2010, 12:03 PM
(Yo) pienso que Carlitos y Enrique van a tener vidas muchas diferentes de cada otra.
The subject pronoun 'yo' is not required because the verb ending in the present tense conveys the person.
You should use the verb 'believe' instead of 'think'.
I believe you meant 'very' when you wrote 'muchas'.
The last phrase 'from each another' has a set form in Spanish. It is transliterated 'the one from the other'.
(Yo) pienso que Carlitos va a cambiar mucho (missing a point here that importante to the understanding of this sentence) con su madre Rosario.
Tanto Carlitos y Rosario van a olvidar(suffix) (missing something here) sus vidas anteriores porque los ellos tendrán logrado sus sueños para reuniendo con cada otra.
Since you started the sentence with 'tanto', I would expect something different instead of 'y'.
The Spanish do not 'forget' something; the thing forgets them. There is an 'accidental forget' that should be used instead. I wrote '(suffix)' to help you figure it out.
The verb also requires a preposition, which is why I wrote '(missing something here)'.
It looks like you're using 'los' as if it were a subject pronoun. 'Ellos' is the subject pronoun, so 'los' doesn't belong.
The English auxiliary verb 'have' has an equivalent in Spanish, but it isn't 'tener'.
After 'sueños', you should use a different preposition.
The following word 'meet' should be in the infinitive (because it's an object of a preposition) and the verb form isn't quite right.
The last three words, 'with each other', is a set phrase in Spanish. It is transliterated as 'the one with the other'.
(Yo) pienso que Rosario va a preguntar Paco para casarse la;
Another verb should be used instead of 'preguntar'.
When the correct verb is substituted, you'll then need to use a totally different sentence structure for the remainder of the words. The transliterated form is:
... Rosario is going to ask that Paco get married with her.
The 'that' is the conjunction 'que'. The 'marry' is in the subjunctive mood. 'Casarse' will be used, but it will appear in a conjugated form in the present subjunctive mood. 'Casarse' will be followed by a preposition. Then, the pronoun 'her' will follow the preposition and it should be in the objective case (find a personal pronoun that can be used as an object of a preposition).
Paco perdonarás (missing something here) Rosario y los ellos se llevarán bien.
El matrimonio ayudará (missing something here) Carlitos porque Carlitos vivirá una vida sana;
Carlitos no se sentirá triste y podrá ir a la escuela y hacer nuevos amigos prontos.
Paco cuidará (missing something here) su familia nueva muy bien.
En contraste, Enrique va a tener problemas.
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Welcome to the forums!!!
In this particular forum, we give hints to help you with your homework. I've highlighted some things in red and wrote some hints in purple. In a couple of places, I just gave you a quick correction.
I divided the paragraph up into smaller chunks for ease of use. :)
There are errors in the sentences I didn't include, but this should give you something to mull over.
sushaneg
November 14, 2010, 10:14 AM
Hi thanks for the great reply! I have corrected almost everything except for the line: (Yo) pienso que Rosario va a preguntar Paco para casarse la. I think preguntar should be replaced with pedir but I am not understanding how to use the subjunctive to express that she will ask him to marry her. I thought subjunctive works in the "casarse que" form. Thanks.
aleCcowaN
November 14, 2010, 10:23 AM
"(Yo) Pienso que Paco le va a pedir a Rosario que se case con él"
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