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alabardero
September 02, 2015, 01:02 PM
Hola Hello

I am Spanish and I'm creating a web page in English and Spanish. I thought it would be easier. I have some phrases I know they are wrong but I don’t know exactly why. If anybody could help me I would appreciate very much.

A powerful GRAPHIC where you can easily see the price of your company according with the MAX, MIN and LAST prices.

Example of one email for 3 companies.

How to read correctly our graphics.


When I write these phrases I can read in Word: Fragment (consider revising). So I know something is wrong but I don’t know.

Thank you
:)

poli
September 02, 2015, 01:12 PM
a powerful graphic where you can easily compare your prices with the ...

how to read our graphics correctly.

alabardero
September 02, 2015, 01:26 PM
Thank you very much Poli. I chaged already.

Rusty
September 02, 2015, 05:28 PM
When considered as a whole, both of your phrases are fragments. They lack a subject and a verb.

First sentence suggestion:
It (subject)
shows (verb)
<-- direct object start -->
a powerful graphical representation of your company's price, providing MAX, MIN and LIST prices.
<-- direct object end -->

Second sentence suggestion:
This paragraph (subject)
teaches (verb)
<-- direct object start -->
how to read our graphics correctly.
<-- direct object end -->


You may write sentence fragments when designing a webpage. The audience expects concise language.
Sentence fragments are particularly suited to advertising/explaining/highlighting features.

The key to a good webpage is how the fragments are used or laid out.

Examples:

How to Read Our Graphics Correctly
The title tells the audience what information this paragraph contains. In English, we capitalize the important words in a title and it looks good if it appears in boldface type.


Our product provides

A powerful graphical representation ...
Another feature goes here


Each item in the list above begins with 'Our product provides', so the subject/verb requirement is satisfied. That way you have no fragments.

alabardero
September 12, 2015, 05:51 AM
Thank you very much. You gave me very good ideas and a new idea.
Thanks again