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richard148
January 10, 2011, 06:43 PM
Hi all,

I'm a beginner in Spanish and I'm wondering if anyone could make sure these paragraphs don't have any errors. Any pointers would be greatly appreciated. I posted here before and the feedback was excellent. ¡Gracias!

What I want to say: There are many shops in the city and they sell everything. The clothes are inexpensive and they have a lot of bargains. You wear casual clothes at the university. For an interview you wear a black suit and tie. In my home I wear blue jeans and a green t-shirt. At a casual party wear jeans and a shirt. For a formal party, I wear the same clothes I would for an interview. I wear an orange swimsuit and a white Panama hat while at the beach with friends. It's the latest style.

What I have: Son muchos las tiendas en la ciudad y venden de todo. La ropa barata y tener muchos ganga. Tú queres llevas ropa informal en la universidad. Para una entrevista, tú llevas negro el traje y la corbata. En mi casa, yo generalmente llevo los jeans azul y la camiseta verde. En fiesta informal llevas los jeans y la camisa. Para fiesta formal, yo llevo mismo ropa para una entrevista. Yo llevo traje de baño anaranjado y sombrero de jipijapa blanco en la playa con amigos. ¡Es de última moda!


What I want to say: The apartment has two bedrooms, two bathrooms, a kitchen and a large living room. You will be sharing my bedroom which has plenty of space. The bedroom has orange walls, two dressers, a TV and a bathroom adjacent to the room. The kitchen has green walls, refrigerator, many cabinets, and a stove. A dining room connects to the kitchen. My favorite place in the apartment is the living room because the red sofa is very comfortable. You will like it!

What I have: El apartamento tiene dos el dormitorio y dos el cuarto de baño y la cocina y grande la sala. Tú estás compartir mi dormitorio cuál mucho sitio. La habitación tiene naranja pared, dos cómodas, el televisor y cuarto de baño adyacente habitación. La cocina tiene la pared verde, la nevera, muchos armarios y la estufa. El comedor conectar a la cocina. Mi favorito sitio en la apartamento es la sala porque el sofá rojo es muy cómodo. ¡Tú voluntad gustas lo!

CrOtALiTo
January 10, 2011, 10:00 PM
Hi all,

I'm a beginner in Spanish and I'm wondering if anyone could make sure these paragraphs don't have any errors. Any pointers would be greatly appreciated. I posted here before and the feedback was excellent. ¡Gracias!

What I want to say: There are many shops in the city and they sell everything. The clothes are inexpensive and they have a lot of bargains. You wear casual clothes at the university. For an interview you wear a black suit and tie. In my home I wear blue jeans and a green t-shirt. At a casual party wear jeans and a shirt. For a formal party, I wear the same clothes I would for an interview. I wear an orange swimsuit and a white Panama hat while at the beach with friends. It's the latest style.

What I have: Son muchos las tiendas en la ciudad y venden de todo. La ropa barata y tener muchos ganga. Tú queres llevas ropa informal en la universidad. Para una entrevista, tú llevas negro el traje y la corbata. En mi casa, yo generalmente llevo los jeans azul y la camiseta verde. En fiesta informal llevas los jeans y la camisa. Para fiesta formal, yo llevo mismo ropa para una entrevista. Yo llevo traje de baño anaranjado y sombrero de jipijapa blanco en la playa con amigos. ¡Es de última moda!


What I want to say: The apartment has two bedrooms, two bathrooms, a kitchen and a large living room. You will be sharing my bedroom which has plenty of space. The bedroom has orange walls, two dressers, a TV and a bathroom adjacent to the room. The kitchen has green walls, refrigerator, many cabinets, and a stove. A dining room connects to the kitchen. My favorite place in the apartment is the living room because the red sofa is very comfortable. You will like it!

What I have: El apartamento tiene dos el dormitorio y dos el cuarto de baño y la cocina y grande la sala. Tú estás compartir mi dormitorio cuál mucho sitio. La habitación tiene naranja pared, dos cómodas, el televisor y cuarto de baño adyacente habitación. La cocina tiene la pared verde, la nevera, muchos armarios y la estufa. El comedor conectar a la cocina. Mi favorito sitio en la apartamento es la sala porque el sofá rojo es muy cómodo. ¡Tú voluntad gustas lo!




I will correct you, because your post have so many mistakes that they need to be corrected.

Son muchas las tiendas en la ciudad y venden de todo. La ropa es muy barata y son una real ganga. Tú quieres llevar ropa informal a la universidad. Para una entrevista, tú llevarías el traje negro y la corbata. En mi casa generalmente llevo los jeans azul y la camiseta verde. En fiestas informales llevas jeans y una camisa. Para una fiesta formal, llevo la misma ropa de una entrevista de trabajo. Llevo traje de baño anaranjado y sobrero de jipijapa de color blanco estando en la playa con los amigos. Es la última
moda!

That post was my correction, really you make a lot of mistakes, but in order to help you, I wrote again your test in English only I translated everything again.

I hope that correction can be useful for you.

Rusty
January 10, 2011, 10:20 PM
No offense intended, but I believe you need to revisit every sentence.

English word order seldom matches Spanish word order. Every word in English has a certain role it plays. The same goes for Spanish. Your task is to learn how to recognize those roles and apply the proper grammar rules to build a sentence. We spent a lot of time in your previous threads trying to teach you some of those basics, and I don't think we even addressed everything you wrote. Once again, I believe you're trying to tackle too much.

Have a look at the first sentence of the second paragraph.

The Spanish noun and article (both indefinite and definite) must agree in gender and number. This you did well when you chose the your subject - el apartamento.

The Spanish verb must agree in person and number with the subject. The proper mood and tense are also very important. You correctly chose the right verb and conjugated it - tiene. :thumbsup: Very good! (I'm puzzled why this same task wasn't repeated in several other spots. :thinking:)

An article doesn't always precede a noun (but it is used more often in Spanish than it is in English). For instance, if a determiner (like dos, mi, or mucho) precedes a noun, the article is not needed. Some determiners agree in number and/or gender with the noun.

If a noun is plural in English, it will most likely be plural in Spanish. So, make sure your translation lists two bedrooms and two bathrooms. (Remember what I said in the last paragraph about determiners.)

An indefinite article, like 'a' in English, has an equivalent in Spanish. In order to translate 'a kitchen' into Spanish, you'll need to use an indefinite article. Do the same for 'a living room'.

Adjectives generally follow the noun they modify and must agree with it in gender and number. You chose the right adjective to describe the living room, but it isn't in the right place.

Finally, the English sentence separates multiple verb complements (direct objects) with commas and a single 'and', yet your translation contains three conjunctions and no commas.

See how many more sentences you can improve upon simply by applying the basics I've already mentioned. Take the time to conjugate verbs, and watch subject/verb, noun/adjective agreement. ;)

Avoid sentences that refer to 'you' in a general sense, like 'you wear a suit to an interview'. The impersonal subject has an equivalent in Spanish, but you shouldn't focus on it for now. Write English sentences that reference a specific person, or group of persons, instead, like 'I wear a suit to an interview'.

sharer
January 10, 2011, 10:32 PM
I think like crotalito.

I help with a few lines:

What I want to say: The apartment has two bedrooms, two bathrooms, a kitchen and a large living room. You will be sharing my bedroom which has plenty of space.

What I have: El apartamento tiene dos (el) dormitorios, (y) dos (el cuarto de) baños, (y) una (la) cocina y una gran(de la) sala. Tú (estás) compartiras mi dormitorio el cuál tiene mucho espacio (sitio).

What I have: El apartamento tiene dos dormitorios, dos baños, una cocina y una gran sala. Tú compartiras mi dormitorio el cuál tiene mucho espacio

richard148
January 11, 2011, 03:28 PM
Thank you all for your help! Rusty, its great to talk to you again. I can't tell you how much help you have been thus far.

I went ahead and reworked my second paragraph. Sorry for all the errors, I had to delay my studies for a couple months. I simplified what I want to say to this:

The apartment has two bedrooms, two bathrooms, a kitchen and a large living room. You will be sharing my bedroom which has plenty of space. The bedroom has orange walls, two dressers, a TV and a bathroom. The kitchen has green walls, a refrigerator, many cabinets, and a stove. A dining room connects to the kitchen. My favorite place in the apartment is the living room because the red sofa is very comfortable. You will like it!

El apartamento tiene dos dormitorios, dos baños, una cocina y una gran sala. Tú compartiras mi dormitorio el cuál tiene mucho espacio. La habitación tiene pareds de color naranja, dos cómodas, un televisor y un baño. La cocina tiene pareds de color verde, una nevera, armarios y una estufa. Un comedor se conecta a la cocina. Mi favorito sitio en la apartamento es la sala porque el sofá de color rojo es muy cómodo. ¡Tú voluntad gustas lo!

AngelicaDeAlquezar
January 11, 2011, 04:03 PM
El apartamento tiene dos dormitorios, dos baños, una cocina y una gran sala. Tú compartiras mi dormitorio el cuál tiene mucho espacio. La habitación tiene pareds de color naranja, dos cómodas, un televisor y un baño. La cocina tiene pareds de color verde, una nevera, armarios y una estufa. Un El comedor se conecta a la cocina. Mi favorito sitio en la apartamento es la sala porque el sofá de color rojo es muy cómodo. ¡Tú voluntad gustas lo!

Your sentences look like you just put them in an online translator or that you're using the first translation in your dictionary. Let me suggest you to try making sure about the meaning of each word before you build a sentence, and take into account that grammar in Spanish involves a very different order of sentences. :)

Pink words have spelling errors.

Green words have (many) grammar errors.

"Voluntad" is not a verb. Try finding the right verb for "to will". :)

richard148
January 11, 2011, 06:15 PM
Your sentences look like you just put them in an online translator or that you're using the first translation in your dictionary. Let me suggest you to try making sure about the meaning of each word before you build a sentence, and take into account that grammar in Spanish involves a very different order of sentences. :)

Pink words have spelling errors.

Green words have (many) grammar errors.

"Voluntad" is not a verb. Try finding the right verb for "to will". :)

Thank you! I have been using a dictionary my translations, maybe its best I use less of it. I made the following corrections.

I couldnt find the verb "to will" so instead of saying "you will like it", I will say "can't wait to meet you".

El apartamento tiene dos dormitorios, dos baños, una cocina y una gran sala. Tú compartes mi dormitorio cuál tiene mucho espacio. La habitación tiene paredes de color naranja, dos cómodas, un televisor y un baño. La cocina tiene paredes de color verde, una nevera, armarios y una estufa. El comedor se conecta a la cocina. La sala es favorito sitio en la apartamento porque el sofá de color rojo es muy cómodo. ¡Estoy impaciente por conocerle!

AngelicaDeAlquezar
January 12, 2011, 12:46 PM
"Cuál" there doesn't bear an accent, as it is not a question.

"Favorito sitio" has the wrong order for noun and adjective... in Spanish we usually put the noun first, and you also need to say for whom the living room is the favourite place. (You can do this through a possessive adjective.)

"La apartamento" has the wrong article, as "la" is feminine and "apartamento" is masculine.


Your sentence "¡Tú voluntad gustas lo!" makes no sense:
- "Will" in English introduces future tense. There is no equivalent of "will" in that sense in Spanish, because it would already be introduced by the verb conjugated in future tense.
- "Gustar" is the right verb, but your conjugation is wrong. Try conjugating it in the future for the second person singular.
The structure of "gustar" is a little tricky in Spanish, as it expresses something similar to "something pleases someone".

- "Tú compartes" is present tense, so it means you're both sharing already a bedroom, but you're expecting this to happen in the future, so there is another verb to be conjugated in the future. :)

richard148
January 12, 2011, 02:56 PM
"Cuál" there doesn't bear an accent, as it is not a question.

"Favorito sitio" has the wrong order for noun and adjective... in Spanish we usually put the noun first, and you also need to say for whom the living room is the favourite place. (You can do this through a possessive adjective.)

"La apartamento" has the wrong article, as "la" is feminine and "apartamento" is masculine.


Your sentence "¡Tú voluntad gustas lo!" makes no sense:
- "Will" in English introduces future tense. There is no equivalent of "will" in that sense in Spanish, because it would already be introduced by the verb conjugated in future tense.
- "Gustar" is the right verb, but your conjugation is wrong. Try conjugating it in the future for the second person singular.
The structure of "gustar" is a little tricky in Spanish, as it expresses something similar to "something pleases someone".

- "Tú compartes" is present tense, so it means you're both sharing already a bedroom, but you're expecting this to happen in the future, so there is another verb to be conjugated in the future. :)


Thanks for your help!:) How is this?

El apartamento tiene dos dormitorios, dos baños, una cocina y una gran sala. Tú compartás mi dormitorio cual tiene mucho espacio. La habitación tiene paredes de color naranja, dos cómodas, un televisor y un baño. La cocina tiene paredes de color verde, una nevera, armarios y una estufa. El comedor se conecta a la cocina. La sala es mi sitio favorito en el apartamento porque el sofá de color rojo es muy cómodo. ¡Tú voluntad gustás lo!

Rusty
January 12, 2011, 06:18 PM
Thanks for your help!:) How is this?

El apartamento tiene dos dormitorios, dos baños, una cocina y una gran sala. Tú compartás mi dormitorio (missing something here, look in previous posts) cual tiene mucho espacio. La habitación tiene paredes de color naranja, dos cómodas, un televisor y un baño. La cocina tiene paredes de color verde, una nevera, armarios y una estufa. El comedor se conecta a la cocina. La sala es mi sitio favorito en el apartamento porque el sofá de color rojo es muy cómodo. ¡Tú voluntad gustás lo!The stuff in red doesn't work.

'You will share' is one word in Spanish (the subject pronoun tú is conveyed by the properly conjugated verb, so it's not said). You have the correct verb stem, but you haven't conjugated it into the future tense.

Use color adjectives once in awhile to break up the monotony. ;)

richard148
January 12, 2011, 07:49 PM
The stuff in red doesn't work.

'You will share' is one word in Spanish (the subject pronoun tú is conveyed by the properly conjugated verb, so it's not said). You have the correct verb stem, but you haven't conjugated it into the future tense.

Use color adjectives once in awhile to break up the monotony. ;)

Thanks Rusty! Not sure what to change within "se conecta a".

El apartamento tiene dos dormitorios, dos baños, una cocina y una gran sala. Compartirás mi dormitorio elcual tiene mucho espacio. La habitación tiene paredes de color naranja, dos cómodas, un televisor y un baño. La cocina tiene paredes de color verde, una nevera, armarios y una estufa. El comedor se conecta a la cocina. La sala es mi sitio favorito en el apartamento porque el sofá de color rojo es muy cómodo. ¡Te gustará!

Rusty
January 12, 2011, 08:24 PM
Thanks Rusty! Not sure what to change within "se conecta a". comunicarse con

El apartamento tiene dos dormitorios, dos baños, una cocina y una gran sala. Compartirás :thumbsup: mi dormitorio, el :thumbsup: cual tiene mucho espacio. La habitación tiene paredes de color naranja, dos cómodas, un televisor y un baño. La cocina tiene paredes de color verde, una nevera, armarios y una estufa. El comedor se conecta a la cocina. La sala es mi sitio favorito en el apartamento porque el sofá de color rojo es muy cómodo. ¡Te gustará! :thumbsup:The stuff in purple can be used to form the correct sentence.

richard148
January 12, 2011, 09:33 PM
The stuff in purple can be used to form the correct sentence.

Thanks Rusty! I added one more sentence. Any errors?

El apartamento tiene dos dormitorios, dos baños, una cocina y una gran sala. Compartirás mi dormitorio, el cual tiene mucho espacio. La habitación tiene paredes de color naranja, dos cómodas, un televisor y un baño. La cocina tiene paredes de color verde, una nevera, armarios y una estufa. El comedor comunicarse con la cocina. Hay un mesa marrón en el comedor. La sala es mi sitio favorito en el apartamento porque el sofá de color rojo es muy cómodo. ¡Te gustará!

Rusty
January 12, 2011, 09:36 PM
What gender is mesa?

You need to conjugate the verb I gave you.

richard148
January 12, 2011, 10:06 PM
What gender is mesa?

You need to conjugate the verb I gave you.

El apartamento tiene dos dormitorios, dos baños, una cocina y una gran sala. Compartirás mi dormitorio, el cual tiene mucho espacio. La habitación tiene paredes de color naranja, dos cómodas, un televisor y un baño. La cocina tiene paredes de color verde, una nevera, armarios y una estufa. El comedor comunica con la cocina. Hay una mesa marrón en el comedor. La sala es mi sitio favorito en el apartamento porque el sofá de color rojo es muy cómodo. ¡Te gustará!

Rusty
January 13, 2011, 04:49 PM
You've corrected the indefinite article. Good job! Always make sure you know the gender of a noun so you can correctly decline the articles and adjectives.

You're almost there with the new verb I gave you! The infinitive I provided was pronominal, so you'll need to deal with that piece, too, when you conjugate it. Without the pronoun, the meaning is wrong.

richard148
January 13, 2011, 06:56 PM
You've corrected the indefinite article. Good job! Always make sure you know the gender of a noun so you can correctly decline the articles and adjectives.

You're almost there with the new verb I gave you! The infinitive I provided was pronominal, so you'll need to deal with that piece, too, when you conjugate it. Without the pronoun, the meaning is wrong.

I don't have any experience with conjugating pronominal verbs but I'm guessing I need the pronoun se before comunica? Or does it go after?

El apartamento tiene dos dormitorios, dos baños, una cocina y una gran sala. Compartirás mi dormitorio, el cual tiene mucho espacio. La habitación tiene paredes de color naranja, dos cómodas, un televisor y un baño. La cocina tiene paredes de color verde, una nevera, armarios y una estufa. El comedor se comunica con la cocina. Hay una mesa marrón en el comedor. La sala es mi sitio favorito en el apartamento porque el sofá de color rojo es muy cómodo. ¡Te gustará!

richard148
January 13, 2011, 07:22 PM
Sorry to bug you all with another paragraph, but I have another one. I went sentence by sentence making sure I didn't have the same errors as last time. I hope there is less to correct.

December, January, Febuary, March and April are winter months. In winter I usually rest because its very bad weather. It snows often and very cold. I wear a thick jacket and shovel the snow. May is the first month of Spring and I do a lot of cleaning. The weather is excellent! I begin to run outside again and plant flowers. June, July, August and September are summer months. It's very hot so much time is spent at beach and parks where I swim. I play golf in the evenings when it's cool. October and November are fall months. The weather is very windy. I rake the leaves, spend much time outdoors and read.

Diciembre, enero, febrero, marzo y abril son los meses de invierno. Descanso en el invierno porque hace muy mal tiempo. Hay mucha nieve y mucho frío. Llevo una chamarra grueso y retiro la nieve. Mayo es mes uno de primavera y limpio mucho. ¡El tiempo es excelente!Comenzo de nuevo corro exterior y planto las flores. Junio, Julio, Agosto y Septiembre son los meses de verano. Hace mucho calor tan mucho tiempo dedico en la playa y los parques donde nado. Gusto jugo al golf por la tarde cuando hace fresco. Octubre y noviembre son los meses de invierno. El tiempe es mucho viento. Rastrillo los hojas, paso mucho tiempo fuera y leo.

Rusty
January 14, 2011, 01:09 AM
I don't have any experience with conjugating pronominal verbs but I'm guessing I need the pronoun se before comunica? Or does it go after?You guessed correctly, it goes before a conjugated verb.

In your newest paragraph, I'll give you a few hints. See what you can do to make it more correct.

The subject needs an article. We don't use one in English, but it's required in Spanish.
Watch noun and adjective agreement. (Another word for jacket is chaqueta.)
The ordinal (http://www.webworkbooks.com/spanish/grammar/numbers%20%E2%80%94%20ordinal%20numbers) 'first' has a counterpart in Spanish (it isn't 'uno').
Comenzar is a stem-changing (http://www.webworkbooks.com/spanish/grammar/stem-changing%20verbs%20%e2%80%94%20e%20to%20ie%20%28ar %20and%20er%20verbs%29) verb.
Two verbs in a row cannot both be conjugated.
The word 'so', when used as a conjunction, has another translation. The adverbs you used with dedico should follow the verb.
Gustar isn't used correctly. Remember what I taught you about that verb?
'The weather is windy' is not translated correctly.

richard148
January 14, 2011, 05:48 PM
You guessed correctly, it goes before a conjugated verb.

In your newest paragraph, I'll give you a few hints. See what you can do to make it more correct.

The subject needs an article. We don't use one in English, but it's required in Spanish.
Watch noun and adjective agreement. (Another word for jacket is chaqueta.)
The ordinal (http://www.webworkbooks.com/spanish/grammar/numbers%20%E2%80%94%20ordinal%20numbers) 'first' has a counterpart in Spanish (it isn't 'uno').
Comenzar is a stem-changing (http://www.webworkbooks.com/spanish/grammar/stem-changing%20verbs%20%e2%80%94%20e%20to%20ie%20%28ar %20and%20er%20verbs%29) verb.
Two verbs in a row cannot both be conjugated.
The word 'so', when used as a conjunction, has another translation. The adverbs you used with dedico should follow the verb.
Gustar isn't used correctly. Remember what I taught you about that verb?
'The weather is windy' is not translated correctly.

Which subjects need an article? When I list each month, do I need to include articles? Thanks!


Diciembre, enero, febrero, marzo y abril son los meses de invierno. Descanso en el invierno porque hace muy mal tiempo. Hay mucha nieve y mucho frío. Llevo una chaqueta grueso y retiro la nieve. Mayo es el primer mes de primavera y limpio mucho. ¡El tiempo es excelente! Comienzo de nuevo corro exterior y planto las flores. Junio, Julio, Agosto y Septiembre son los meses de verano. Hace mucho calor (así que/entonces) dedico mucho tiempo en la playa y los parques donde nado. Me gusta jugar al golf por la tarde cuando hace fresco. Octubre y noviembre son los meses de invierno. El tiempe es muy ventoso. Rastrillo los hojas, paso mucho tiempo fuera y leo.