Please, check this sentence

Please, check this sentence
 

Would you mind checking this sentence, please? Thanks in advance.

[Talking about them] ...to whom an abrupt turning point forces them to seek...

There's nothing wrong with the fragment.

Thank you, Rusty. :) :rose:

That's not a sentence. If you gave us the full sentence, it might be that "...whom an abrupt turning point forces to seek..." is better.

OK.

His characters sense life, like Hemingway's veterans, to whom an abrupt turning point forces them to seek comfort...

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I would write it this way: His characters sense life, like Hemingway's veterans, and seek comfort when faced with life's abrupt turning points

There isn't an indirect object; the direct object doesn't take "to". And English doesn't usually* double up a pronoun and a noun. So the grammatical sentence with the fewest changes would be:

His characters sense life, like Hemingway's veterans, whom an abrupt turning point forces to seek comfort...

However, I think this would be more natural with the passive voice:

His characters sense life, like Hemingway's veterans, who are forced by an abrupt turning point to seek comfort...



* I'm sure someone has a counter-example!