My Curriculum Vitae

[Deibi12]

Hi guys, can somebody tell me If I've made mistakes in this CV.



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[poli]

In the objective part of the resume, you have a comma between responsible and hardworking. This comma should be removed and replaced after the word person.

You may want to find another term for "thinking outside the box" because it is a cliché.

In the United States, The term CV is used for professionals such as medical doctors. The rest of us folks use résume (accent mark optional).

[Rusty]

Originally Posted by poli

In the objective part of the resume, you have a comma between responsible and hardworking. This comma should be removed and replaced after the word person.

Actually, the comma between the two adjectives is correctly placed. The two adjectives in a row are coordinate adjectives - both modifying the noun that follows. This is also the case in a sentence like "tall, dark and handsome." No comma is needed when the adjective and noun are separated by a coordinating conjunction, but 'tall' and 'dark', which both modify the noun, must be separated with a comma.
Here is another example of coordinate adjectives:
A tall, dark figure loomed before her.

[poli]

Nope tall dark stranger does not take the comma. Too many commas misplaced on a resume looks bad.

[Rusty]

Sorry to disagree, but "tall, dark" absolutely needs a comma (reference 'coordinate adjectives'). Many people write the phrase without the comma, as evidenced by a search on the internet, but that doesn't mean the rule doesn't exist. (You'll find people/sites that do use the comma correctly. Most of those sites are teaching English punctuation rules.)

[Perikles]

May I join in? Rusty is quite correct. Fowler (my English grammar bible) says commas are inserted in lists of adjectives. However, if the last or latter adjective is in closer relation to the noun than the earlier one(s) than there is the convention that commas may be omitted: a good little boy; a super-efficient liquid-cooled rear engine. etc.

However, he also says that with a list, there should be a comma before the and, such as excesses of public, political, and intellectual opinion. This is known as the Oxford comma (which is of course omitted by the Cambridge University Press on principle).

I don't think this is used much these days, but I still use it.

[Rusty]

Thanks, Perikles.
Adding to my previous comment, here are a couple of sites that list the two tests you can use to determine whether adjectives are coordinate or cumulative:
http://englishplus.com/grammar/00000072.htm
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/607/02/ (see item 6.)

[poli]

Just google it and I assure you you wont find tall,dark stranger. I just aint grammar
When two adjectives together, one modifies the adjective and not the noun. In order for them to be separate from each other the word and must be inserted. Commas incorrectly placed start looking like the way Cantíflas speaks

[Rusty]

I said "tall, dark figure" (and the OP's objective says "responsible, hardworking person who" (I think)). These adjectives pass the two tests mentioned above, so they are coordinate adjectives and need to be separated by a comma.

Lots of people write "tall dark stranger," and it's proper to do so. Like Perikles said, if the last adjective is in closer relation to the noun than the previous, then no comma is used. This is because they are cumulative adjectives. Ask yourself the two questions listed in the sites I provided links to.
Can you reverse these adjectives? ("dark tall stranger") Nope, that doesn't sound right. This is because 'dark' is more closely paired with 'stranger'.

Now, let's change 'dark' to 'dark-haired'. Test results: you can insert 'and' in between the adjectives and you can reverse them.
Both adjectives modify the noun equally, so these are coordinate adjectives and they must be separated with a comma.

Google "a tall, dark-haired man" and you'll find that lots of people use the comma correctly.
Likewise, google "a responsible, hardworking person who" and you'll find that most people correctly use the comma. One person who didn't use the comma correctly also misspelled 'references' in the same sentence. Oops!

[poli]

The sea is angry blue (specific color). The sea is blue and angry (very choppy but blue).

The comma is used only when the adjectives are separate and modify the
noun. The comma in this case is only used when there are three separate
adjectives. If there are only two separate adjectives the word and takes
the place of the comma.

[Perikles]

Originally Posted by poli

The sea is angry blue (specific color). The sea is blue and angry (very choppy by blue).

The comma is used only when the adjectives are separate and modify the
noun. The comma in this case is only used when there are three separate
adjectives. If there are only two separate adjectives the word and takes
the place of the comma.

I think you might be confusing the issue here where you are using an example with complementary adjectives.

Meanwhile, as a light aside, I have just read a news report which demonstrates the absurdity when you omit a comma:

.. police today confirmed that between 2002 and 2004 police were called to a total of four domestic-related incidents at the house, none of which resulted in either party being charged with any offence.

That's police overkill !

[poli]

...which is almost as bad as comma overkill.

By the way: I am now seeing this as a moot point and a matter of style. Lots commas, especially when they are
not necessary are de trop.

[Perikles]

Originally Posted by poli

Lots commas, especially when they are
not necessary are de trop.

Was that intentional? There is a comma missing from that and I'm sure it has to be there.

The root statement is: Lots (of) commas are de trop

When you interject some comment or restriction, surely you have to contain it within commas for it to read properly:

Lots commas, especially when they are not necessary, are de trop.

What,,,, do,,,, you,,, think?

[poli]

Ha ha it was a typo, but I have been giving this more thought.

When two adjectives are used to modify the noun, one of the adjectives takes on the characteristics of an adverb. For example delicious cold ice cream can also be said in the following way: deliciously cold ice cream.
Neither of them require commas. Even though it's a bit much (or as you may write I write a bit, much), if you want to add one between the two adjectives, do so.

[Deibi12]

OK muchas gracias a todo por sus opiniones sobre las comas, pero no me han dicho si ya puedo entregarlo o si hay algún error. thanks anyway!

[Viajero]

Esto es uno de mis vídeos favoritas. ¡La importancia de puntuacion!