Carta de motivación en español

[tanina86]

Hi!
I need help for my motivation letter in Spanish.
It is rather urgent..
May someone help me and correct the text, please?

I would be very grateful!
thanks to all

tanina

Here is the text:

En los últimos años, paralelamente a la realización del curso de mi estudio, me embarqué en una búsqueda personal, a veces alternativos y, a veces íntimamente ligado a mi formación, lo que me impulsó en varias ocasiones desafiarme a mí mismo en las experiencias que me puedan transmitir y mis habilidades a lo que me apetece, no sólo profesional, pero capaz de hacerse rico de una manera profunda y para responder a un requerimiento en el que para mí sigue siendo difícil de definir o quizás no se presta a la definición. Tengo muchos sueños, como algunos de renuncia como consecuencia de las dificultades encontradas, un poco de cinismo contagiosa, endémica entre los jóvenes mis contemporáneos y compatriotas, y quizás un poco 'de la humildad me siento un poco "avergonzada de decirlo. En primer lugar, sigo creyendo en la posibilidad de aprender y utilizar mis conocimientos a lo que usted conseguirá interesado. Tengo muchos intereses, la curiosidad por otras culturas y en diferentes entornos culturales. Trabajo para la promoción de la cultura, puede, en efecto, descubrir otra cultura, para vivir y dar testimonio a través de su trabajo es el viaje que me gustaría tener la oportunidad de empezar con esto, y entonces seguíamos adelante. Para ello, me gustaría poner mis habilidades al servicio y, como un proyecto personal, yo también quiero hacer un documental sobre él. Entre los sueños que por primera vez mencionado, y yo estoy tratando de hacer que se materializan en los proyectos, que han, de hecho, para trabajar como director de cine. Siempre he leído con entusiasmo los estímulos se presentaron ante mí en los laboratorios universitarios, donde, con pocos recursos pero una gran cantidad de ideas que podrían aplicar los productos audiovisuales, también busca ampliar estas experiencias en actividades fuera de la universidad que me he visto involucrado en talleres y concursos para realizadores. Él, también, un trabajo apasionado de los análisis y la investigación llevada a cabo en el Festival Internacional de Cine de Roma, durante la preparación de un examen que incluya la organización de eventos. Tengo que entender cómo desarrollar un evento de este tipo, para comparar con otros festivales internacionales, y yo hice una solicitud para participar activamente en la próxima edición como pasante.
Todo esto es sólo parte de lo que la oportunidad de participar en el proyecto sería para mí un único y muy importante. Ser parte activa en un ambiente de ferviente de la cultura, las oportunidades educativas sin duda sería capaz de enriquecer en gran medida y podría ofrecer un punto de vista de acceso a otras experiencias relacionadas.

[Rusty]

Originally Posted by tanina86

Hi!
I need help with my motivation letter in Spanish.
It is rather urgent.
Could someone help me and correct the text, please?

I would be very grateful!
Thanks to all.

Tanina

Even though it may not be your mother tongue, is it possible to get an English version of the text? There are several phrases I can't understand and it would help if I knew what you were trying to say.

I'm no expert, but a cover letter (motivation letter) should be a concise letter, typically containing three paragraphs in the body. There's little need for anything more than stating which job you're seeking to fill, providing some idea as to why you'd be the best candidate to fill that job, and expressing your willingness to present yourself at the company to demonstrate your abilities.
A good first course of action would be to arrange the letter according to accepted standards.

[tanina86]

Thanks for your advice. The motivation letter is for an internship in Art/Culture/Media not yet well defined so I had to be a bit generic. I gave more precise information about my professional profile and abilities in other documents.

This is the text in English. I hope it can help but there may be some errors too. Anyway it would be very helpful for me if you could correct even only some parts of the text. Thank you once again.

"In the last years, in parallel to the completion of my course of study, I embarked on a personal quest, sometimes alternative and sometimes intimately connected to my training, which spurred me on several occasions to put to the test in experiences that might convey me and my skills to what I could tell as not only vocational, but able to get rich inwardly and to respond to an inner requirement, that I still find difficult to define or perhaps just lends itself to the definitions. I have many dreams, although a bit of resignation as a result of encountered difficulties, a bit of contagious, endemic cynicism among young people of my age and Country, and perhaps a bit of humility, make me feel a little embarrassed to say it. First of all, I still believe in the possibility to learn and to apply my knowledge into something that can get me passionate about. I have many interests, curiosity for other cultures and for different cultural environments. Working for the promotion of culture, indeed, discovering another culture, living it and bearing witness through my work is the journey that I wish I’ll have the opportunity to start with this experience, and then I'd like to continue. To this end, I would put my skills to the service and, as a personal project, I would also make a documentary about it. Among the dreams that I first mentioned, and that I am trying to realize as projects, I have, in fact, to work as a filmmaker. I always enjoyed with enthusiasm the opportunities that I had in university laboratories, when, with few resources but a lot of ideas, I could make audiovisual products, also seeking to extend these experiences in non-academic activities that involved me in workshops and competitions for videomakers. In the same way, I enjoyed a work of analysis and research on the International Film Festival of Rome, during the preparation of an examination covering the organization of events. I had the opportunity to understand how to develop an event of this kind, to compare with other international festivals, and I applied to participate actively in the next edition as an intern.
All that tells only something about how the opportunity to join the project could be for me an unique and highly significant experience. Being an active part in a fervent atmosphere of culture, would be certainly an educational opportunity able to enrich me greatly and to offer me a vantage point of access to other related experiences."

[Rusty]

OK. Not meaning to offend in any way, the English version is too hard to follow and understand. It has way too many words that don't flatter your skills and personality.
Since English is my mother tongue, I'll first provide a reworded version using language that flows better. In order to achieve that goal, many of your words have been omitted.

Original: In the last years, in parallel to the completion of my course of study, I embarked on a personal quest, sometimes alternative and sometimes intimately connected to my training, which spurred me on several occasions to put to the test in experiences that might convey me and my skills to what I could tell as not only vocational, but able to get rich inwardly and to respond to an inner requirement, that I still find difficult to define or perhaps just lends itself to the definitions. I have many dreams, although a bit of resignation as a result of encountered difficulties, a bit of contagious, endemic cynicism among young people of my age and Country, and perhaps a bit of humility, make me feel a little embarrassed to say it. First of all, I still believe in the possibility to learn and to apply my knowledge into something that can get me passionate about. I have many interests, curiosity for other cultures and for different cultural environments. Working for the promotion of culture, indeed, discovering another culture, living it and bearing witness through my work is the journey that I wish I’ll have the opportunity to start with this experience, and then I'd like to continue. To this end, I would put my skills to the service and, as a personal project, I would also make a documentary about it. Among the dreams that I first mentioned, and that I am trying to realize as projects, I have, in fact, to work as a filmmaker. I always enjoyed with enthusiasm the opportunities that I had in university laboratories, when, with few resources but a lot of ideas, I could make audiovisual products, also seeking to extend these experiences in non-academic activities that involved me in workshops and competitions for videomakers. In the same way, I enjoyed a work of analysis and research on the International Film Festival of Rome, during the preparation of an examination covering the organization of events. I had the opportunity to understand how to develop an event of this kind, to compare with other international festivals, and I applied to participate actively in the next edition as an intern. All that tells only something about how the opportunity to join the project could be for me an unique and highly significant experience. Being an active part in a fervent atmosphere of culture, would be certainly an educational opportunity able to enrich me greatly and to offer me a vantage point of access to other related experiences.

Reworded Version: In the last years, Beginning with the completion of my course of study, I embarked on a personal quest, sometimes alternatively and sometimes intimately connected with my training, which spurred me on several occasions to put my training to the test with not only vocational endeavors that might convey me and my skills to what I could tell as not only vocational, but with experiences that answer an inner yearning to enrich my skills able to get rich inwardly and to respond to an inner requirement, that I still find difficult to define or perhaps just lends itself to the definitions. I have many dreams, although a bit of resignation as a result of encountered difficulties, a bit of contagious, endemic cynicism among young people of my age and country, and perhaps a bit of humility, make me feel a little embarrassed to speak them. First of all, I still believe in the possibility of being passionate about learning and to applying my knowledge into something that can get me passionate. to my many interests. Curiosity about other cultures and for different cultural environments is one of my interests. Working for the promotion of culture, or discovering another culture, living it and bearing witness through my work is a journey that I hope to have the opportunity to start with this new endeavor, and then I'd like to continue. To this end, I would put my skills to the test and, as a personal project, I would also make a documentary about it. Among the dreams that I first mentioned, and that I am trying to realize as projects, I have, in fact, worked as a filmmaker. I enthusiastically enjoyed with enthusiasm the opportunities that I had at the university laboratories, when, with few resources but a lot of ideas, I could make audiovisual productions. I also sought to extend these experiences in non-academic activities that involved me in workshops and competitions for videomakers. In the same way, I enjoyed being involved in an work of analysis and research piece at the International Film Festival of Rome, during the preparation of an examination covering the organization of events. I had the opportunity to understand how to develop an event of this kind, to compare with other international magnitude and I applied to actively participate in the next edition, as an intern. All that tells only something about how The opportunity to join your project would be for me a unique and highly significant experience for me. Being an active participant in a fervent atmosphere of culture, would certainly be an educational opportunity that enriches me greatly and offers me a vantage point of access to other related experiences.

Now that it's easier to translate, see how you do.


Reworded version:

Beginning with the completion of my course of study,
I embarked on a personal quest to put my training to the test with not only vocational endeavors,
but with experiences that answer an inner yearning to enrich my skills.
I have many dreams.
I believe in the possibility of being passionate about learning and applying my knowledge to my many interests.
Curiosity about other cultures and different cultural environments is one of my interests.
Working for the promotion of culture, or discovering another culture,
is a journey that I hope to have with this new endeavor.
To this end, I would put my skills to the test and, as a personal project,
I would also make a documentary about it.
Among the dreams that I mentioned, I have, in fact, worked as a filmmaker.
I enthusiastically enjoyed the opportunities I had at the university when,
with few resources but a lot of ideas, I could make audiovisual productions.
I also sought to extend these experiences in non-academic activities that involved me in workshops and competitions for videomakers.
I enjoyed being involved in an analysis and research piece at the International Film Festival of Rome.
I had the opportunity to understand how to develop an event of international magnitude and I applied to actively participate in the next edition, as an intern.
The opportunity to join your project would be a unique and highly significant experience for me.
Being an active participant in a fervent atmosphere of culture would certainly be an educational opportunity that enriches me greatly and offers access to other related experiences.

[tanina86]

Thank you I really appreciate your help!
I'll try to make you understand better what I meant in some points..

Beginning with the completion of my course of study Does it mean 'after the completion', doesn't it? Here I meant 'while I was finishing my studies' I embarked on a personal quest to put my training to the test with not only vocational endeavors, but with experiences that answer an inner yearning to enrich my skills. I have many dreams. * I do not know if it makes sense to leave only this sentence. For me, the next part that you cut was important to make understand why I'm motivated to do work experience abroad. The context in which I am tends to 'turn off' these dreams (resignation, cynicism, even among the young, lack of initiative, too often encoutering obstacles and closed doors for young). How could I simply say that in Spanish? I believe in the possibility of being passionate about learning and applying my knowledge to my many interests. I would say that I want to continue to learn and I would like to convey my interests in a job I'm passionate about. Curiosity about other cultures and different cultural environments is one of my interests. I don't know if curiosity can be an interest. Maybe I wanted to say 'I'm very curious and interested in other cultures.' I think I didn't mean 'environments' but cultural 'fields', 'areas' Working for the promotion of culture, or discovering another culture, Discovering another culture, even promoting it through my work in the field of DESIGN as a MULTIMEDIA DESIGNER [I do not know if it's correct, I am just trying to clarify the meaning ] is a journey that I hope to have with this new endeavor. Here I said I would like to continue this kind of 'journey', to continue in this direction in my career because I have to specify in the letter where I see myself after this experience. To this end, I would put my skills to the test and, as a personal project, I would also make a documentary about it. Among the dreams that I mentioned, I have, in fact, worked as a filmmaker. I don't work as a filmmaker. I would like to work in film production. I made some videos but never movies I enthusiastically enjoyed the opportunities I had at the university when, with few resources but a lot of ideas, I could make audiovisual productions. I also sought to extend these experiences in non-academic activities that involved me in workshops and competitions for videomakers. I enjoyed being involved in an analysis and research piece at the International Film Festival of Rome. Maybe I have to specify that it was an university work about the International Film Festival of Rome. I had the opportunity to understand how to develop an event of international magnitude and I applied to actively participate in the next edition, as an intern. I add these lines: In addition to my interest in film and multicultural context, it was stimulating to see how all aspects of design that I covered in my training are involved in the design of such an event: product design (gadgets, merchandising), exhibit design, visual and multimedia communication. I think that being versatile, contributing creatively on several levels as a designer, is the most exciting side of this profession. The opportunity to join your project would be a unique and highly significant experience for me. Being an active participant in a a new cultural context would certainly be an educational opportunity that enriches me greatly and offers access to other related experiences.

Durante la realización de mis estudios, Me embarqué en una búsqueda personal,para poner a prueba mi entrenamiento no sólo con esfuerzos profesionales, sino también con experiencias que responden a un deseo interno de enriquecer mis conocimientos. * Tengo muchos sueños, aunque el contexto en el que estoy tiende a desalentar estos sueños. La renuncia como consecuencia de las dificultades encontradas y el cinismo están muy extendidas entre los jóvenes. La falta de iniciativas, los obstáculos frecuentes y puertas cerradas, no nos ayudan en la formación. Sin embargo, yo creo todavía en la posibilidad de seguir aprendiendo y de aplicar mis conocimientos en algo apasionante para mí. Tengo gran interés y curiosidad por otras culturas y por diferentes ámbitos de la cultura. Descubrir otra cultura, incluso promover a través de mi trabajo en el campo del diseño como diseñador multimedia es el viaje que espero poder empezar con esta oportunidad y que me gustaria continuar. Para ello, me gustaría poner a prueba mis habilidades y, como un proyecto personal, yo también quiero hacer un documental sobre la experiencia. De echo, uno de mis sueños que he mencionado es trabajar en un estudio de producción cinematográfica. Me dio la bienvenida a la oportunidad que me dieron a la universidad cuando, con pocos recursos, pero muchas ideas, yo he podido crear productos audiovisuales. También traté de extender estas experiencias en actividades extra-académicas que me han involucrado en talleres y concursos para realizadores. También me pareciò muy interesante trabajar en un proyecto universitario de análisis y de investigación sobre el Festival Internacional de Cine de Roma. Tuve la oportunidad de entender como se desarrolla un evento internacional y yo he presentado solicitud para participar activamente en la próxima edición, como pasante. Además de mi interés por el cine y el contexto multicultural, fue estimulante observar como en el diseño de un evento como éste intervienen todos los aspectos de diseño que he podido encontrar en mi formación: diseño de producto (gadgets, merchandising), diseño de exposiciones, diseño de comunicación visual y multimedia. Ser versátil, capaz de contribuir de manera creativa en varios niveles como diseñador, creo que es, de echo, el lado más apasionante de esta profesión. Participar en el proyecto sería para mí una experiencia única y altamente significativa. Ser parte activa en un nuevo contexto cultural sería sin duda una oportunidad educativa que puede enriquecer mucho y ofrecer acceso a otras experiencias relacionadas.

I hope now it's better
I had some difficulties and it took me some time
Now I have very little time to make the last corrections so I hope you can help me again and answer me soon
thank you very very much

[Rusty]

Originally Posted by tanina86

Durante la realización de
mis estudios, me embarqué en una
búsqueda personal,para
poner a prueba mi entrenamiento
no sólo con esfuerzos profesionales,
sino también con experiencias que
responden a un deseo interno de
enriquecer mis conocimientos.
Tengo muchos sueños.
(Yo) Creo en la posibilidad
de seguir aprendiendo y
de aplicar mis conocimientos
en algo apasionante para mí.

Tengo gran interés y
curiosidad por otras
culturas y por diferentes
ámbitos de la cultura.

Descubrir otra cultura,
incluso promover a través
de mi trabajo en el campo
del diseño como
diseñador multimedia,
es el viaje que espero
poder empezar con esta
oportunidad y que
me gustaría continuar.

Para ello, me gustaría
poner a prueba mis
habilidades y, como un
proyecto personal, (yo)
también quiero hacer
un documental sobre la
experiencia. De hecho, uno de los
sueños que tengo es trabajar
en un estudio de producción cinematográfica.

Acogí la
oportunidad que me dieron
en la universidad cuando,
con pocos recursos, pero con
muchas ideas, (yo) he podido
crear productos audiovisuales.
También traté de extender estas
experiencias a actividades
no académicas que me han involucrado
en workshops y concursos para realizadores.
También me pareció muy interesante
trabajar en un proyecto universitario de
análisis y de investigación sobre la
Festival Internacional de Cine de Roma.

Tuve la oportunidad de
entender como se desarrolla
un evento internacional y (yo)
solicité
participar activamente en la
próxima edición, como practicante.

Además de mi interés por el cine
y el contexto multicultural, me animó mucho
observar como en el
diseño de un evento como éste
intervienen todos los aspectos de
diseño que he estudiado: diseño de productos
(gadgets, merchandising), diseño de
exposiciones, diseño de comunicación
visual y multimedia.
Ser versátil, capaz de contribuir de
manera creativa a varios niveles
como diseñador, creo que es, de hecho,
la parte más apasionante de esta profesión.
Participar en el proyecto sería para mí
una experiencia única y altamente significativa.
Ser parte activa de un nuevo contexto cultural
sería sin duda una oportunidad educativa
que enriquece mucho y ofrece acceso a
otras experiencias relacionadas.

I've made a couple of corrections, but there are most likely others to make. Wait for others to opine.

[tanina86]

..any other corrections?
Thank you for all.

I added these lines:

[...]Tengo muchos sueños, aunque
el contexto en el que estoy
tiende a desalentar estos sueños.
La renuncia como consecuencia
de las dificultades encontradas y
el cinismo están muy extendidas
entre los jóvenes. La falta de
iniciativas, los obstáculos
frecuentes y puertas cerradas,
no nos ayudan en la formación.
Sin embargo, yo creo
todavía en...[...]

[Rusty]

Originally Posted by tanina86

Thank you for all. You're welcome.

I added these lines:

[...]Tengo muchos sueños, aunque
el contexto en el que estoy
tiende a desalentarlos.
El cinismo y la renuncia como consecuencia
de las dificultades encontradas están muy
extendidos entre los jóvenes. La falta de
iniciativas, los obstáculos
frecuentes y las puertas cerradas,
no nos ayudan en la formación.
Sin embargo, yo creo
todavía en...[...]

I wouldn't include this on a cover letter.

[CrOtALiTo]

Even though you have helped, I think he should to reach the understanding first of the word he is writing, there're a lot of word with a complexity in the paragraphs that I can understand although I know Spanish.

I'd like to see a new version from him of all those paragraphs.

Greetings,