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Old December 19, 2015, 05:28 AM
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Smile Please check for awkward phrasings in small paragraph?

I have a feeling there are many strange, non-native-sounding phrasings in there. Can you please point them out to me? I’d be very grateful xxx.

Hay un blog escrito por un joven polígloto inglés que me gusta leer. El nombre del blog es Rawlangs, y en unos de sus artículos, se escribe que estudiar un idioma en el extranjero te hace sentir muy vulnerable, porque muchas veces ves que los niños hablen más bien que ti o tengas dificultad en comprender todas las etiquetas sociales, pero es en hacerse vulnerable que uno puede aprender y progresar. Una estadía lingüística es una aventura cuales todos los desafíos debamos aceptar con los brazos abiertos.
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Old December 19, 2015, 06:21 AM
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I've noted a few things below, but would have used alternate phrasing in a couple of spots. Wait for others to give their opinions.
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Hay un blog escrito por un joven polígloto inglés que me gusta leer. El nombre del blog es Rawlangs, (no comma here)
y en unos (I believe you meant only one article)
de sus artículos, se escribe (even though this is grammatically correct, it doesn't go well with what follows, which is not written in an impersonal way - substitute 'dice')
que estudiar un idioma en el extranjero te hace sentir muy vulnerable, porque muchas veces ves que los niños hablen más bien que ti (there's no reason for using subjunctive mood - substitute 'mejor')
o tengas (nothing subjunctive here)
dificultad en comprender todas las etiquetas sociales, pero es en hacerse vulnerable que uno puede aprender y progresar.(I wouldn't switch from personal address to impersonal here - if you choose to do so, substitute 'se' for 'uno')
Una estadía lingüística es una aventura cuales (should be 'en la que')
todos los desafíos debamos (nothing subjunctive here)
aceptar con los brazos abiertos.
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Old December 19, 2015, 08:05 AM
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¡Gracias por su ayuda, Sr. Rusty!
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